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#13 closed editorial (fixed)

RFC editor changes in RFC4346, sections 1-4

Reported by: pasi.eronen@… Owned by:
Priority: minor Milestone: milestone1
Component: draft-ietf-tls-rfc4346-bis Version: 02
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It looks like 4346bis is based on the last draft of 2246bis, so the changes done by RFC editor when preparing RFC4346 are missing.

Here are the edits for sections 1 to 4:

S1 "RC4 [SCH], etc." -> "RC4 [SCH] etc."
S1 "higher level" -> "higher-level"
S1 "left up to the judgment" -> "left to the judgment"
S1 "protocols which run on" -> "protocols that run on"

S1.2 change to: In this document, the keywords "MUST", "MUST 
NOT", "REQUIRED",  "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT" and "MAY" are to be 
interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [REQ].

S2 "their priority, are:" -> "their priority, are as follows:"
S2 "will then be able to" -> "can"
S2 "two sub-goals: to prevent" -> "two sub-goals: preventing"
S2 "and to avoid the need" -> "and avoiding the need"

S3 "Goals of this document" -> "Goals of This Document"
S3 "down prior versions" -> "down prior versions)"
S3 "those doing cryptographic" -> "for those doing cryptographic"
S3 "nor interface" -> "or of interface"

S4 "Presentation language" -> "Presentation Language"
S4 "TLS only, not to have" -> "TLS only; it has no"
S4 "(i.e. 8 bits)" -> "(i.e., 8 bits)"
S4 "Single byte entities" -> "Single-byte entities"

S4.1 "Basic block size" -> "Basic Block Size"
S4.1 "From the bytestream a" -> "From the bytestream, a"
S4.2 "single byte" -> "single-byte"
S4.3 "In either case the length" -> "In either case, the length"
S4.3 "a new type T' that is" -> "a new type, T', that"
S4.3 "fixed length" -> "fixed-length"
S4.3 "Here T' occupies" -> "Here, T' occupies"
S4.3 "Variable length vectors" -> "Variable-length vectors"
S4.3 "When encoded, the" -> "When these are encoded, the"
S4.3 "A variable length vector" -> "A variable-length vector"
S4.3 "a two byte" -> "a two-byte"
S4.3 "17 byte" -> "17-byte"

S4.4 "fixed length series" -> "fixed-length series"
S4.5 "1, 2 or 4" -> "1, 2, or 4"
S4.6 title: "Constructed types" -> "Constructed Types"
S4.6 "type's name using" -> "type's name, with"

S4.7 "Cryptographic attributes" -> "Cryptographic Attributes"
S4.7 "20 bytes of the SHA hash" -> "20 bytes of the SHA-1 hash"
S4.7 "cryptographically-secure" -> "cryptographically secure"
S4.7 "which are block-ciphered" -> "that are block-ciphered"
S4.7 "following example:" -> "following example,"
S4.7 "The contents of hash" -> "the contents of hash"
S4.7 "algorithm, then the" -> "algorithm, and then the"
S4.7 "bytes would be equal to 2" -> "bytes, would be equal to two"
S4.7 "due to the fact that the algorithm" -> "because the algorithm"
S4.8: "For example," -> "For example:"

Change History (2)

comment:1 Changed 15 years ago by pasi.eronen@…

  • Milestone set to milestone1

comment:2 Changed 15 years ago by ekr@…

  • Resolution set to fixed
  • Status changed from new to closed
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