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Closed 15 years ago

#13 closed editorial (fixed)

RFC editor changes in RFC4346, sections 1-4

Reported by: pasi.eronen@… Owned by:
Priority: minor Milestone: milestone1
Component: draft-ietf-tls-rfc4346-bis Version: 02
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Description

It looks like 4346bis is based on the last draft of 2246bis, so the changes done by RFC editor when preparing RFC4346 are missing.

Here are the edits for sections 1 to 4:

S1 "RC4 [SCH], etc." -> "RC4 [SCH] etc."
S1 "higher level" -> "higher-level"
S1 "left up to the judgment" -> "left to the judgment"
S1 "protocols which run on" -> "protocols that run on"

S1.2 change to: In this document, the keywords "MUST", "MUST 
NOT", "REQUIRED",  "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT" and "MAY" are to be 
interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [REQ].

S2 "their priority, are:" -> "their priority, are as follows:"
S2 "will then be able to" -> "can"
S2 "two sub-goals: to prevent" -> "two sub-goals: preventing"
S2 "and to avoid the need" -> "and avoiding the need"

S3 "Goals of this document" -> "Goals of This Document"
S3 "down prior versions" -> "down prior versions)"
S3 "those doing cryptographic" -> "for those doing cryptographic"
S3 "nor interface" -> "or of interface"

S4 "Presentation language" -> "Presentation Language"
S4 "TLS only, not to have" -> "TLS only; it has no"
S4 "(i.e. 8 bits)" -> "(i.e., 8 bits)"
S4 "Single byte entities" -> "Single-byte entities"

S4.1 "Basic block size" -> "Basic Block Size"
S4.1 "From the bytestream a" -> "From the bytestream, a"
S4.2 "single byte" -> "single-byte"
S4.3 "In either case the length" -> "In either case, the length"
S4.3 "a new type T' that is" -> "a new type, T', that"
S4.3 "fixed length" -> "fixed-length"
S4.3 "Here T' occupies" -> "Here, T' occupies"
S4.3 "Variable length vectors" -> "Variable-length vectors"
S4.3 "When encoded, the" -> "When these are encoded, the"
S4.3 "A variable length vector" -> "A variable-length vector"
S4.3 "a two byte" -> "a two-byte"
S4.3 "17 byte" -> "17-byte"

S4.4 "fixed length series" -> "fixed-length series"
S4.5 "1, 2 or 4" -> "1, 2, or 4"
S4.6 title: "Constructed types" -> "Constructed Types"
S4.6 "type's name using" -> "type's name, with"

S4.7 "Cryptographic attributes" -> "Cryptographic Attributes"
S4.7 "20 bytes of the SHA hash" -> "20 bytes of the SHA-1 hash"
S4.7 "cryptographically-secure" -> "cryptographically secure"
S4.7 "which are block-ciphered" -> "that are block-ciphered"
S4.7 "following example:" -> "following example,"
S4.7 "The contents of hash" -> "the contents of hash"
S4.7 "algorithm, then the" -> "algorithm, and then the"
S4.7 "bytes would be equal to 2" -> "bytes, would be equal to two"
S4.7 "due to the fact that the algorithm" -> "because the algorithm"
S4.8: "For example," -> "For example:"

Change History (2)

comment:1 Changed 15 years ago by pasi.eronen@…

  • Milestone set to milestone1

comment:2 Changed 15 years ago by ekr@…

  • Resolution set to fixed
  • Status changed from new to closed
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