Opened 8 years ago

Closed 8 years ago

#183 closed enhancement (fixed)

editorials

Reported by: jouni.nospam@… Owned by: jouni.nospam@…
Priority: trivial Milestone:
Component: dynamic-discovery Version:
Severity: Waiting for Shepherd Writeup Keywords:
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Description

As part of the document shepherd proto write-up I read the I-D. These are the editorials I found during the first read.

o The I-D uses multiple conventions for "timeout" such as "time out" and "time-out".
o I think is "a NAI" should be "an NAI".
o In section 2.1.1.3. "dynamic discover" is missing 'y'.
o TTL, DNS, PKI, RR, .. are never expanded. Loads of acronyms actually.
o In Section 3.1. the bullet list items lack full stops.
o In Section 3.4.1 the bullet list items lack full stops.
o In Section 7. "They re" should be "They are".
o In Section 7. [I-D.housley-pkix-oids] in now RFC7299.
o In Section 2.1.1.1. Figure 1 last line has unnecessary space in it.

Change History (1)

comment:1 Changed 8 years ago by stefan.winter@…

  • Resolution set to fixed
  • Status changed from new to closed

I have fixed the draft in these respects. Things to note:

  • "timeout" and "time out" still both occur (only "time-out" has gone) - the former is used as a noun, whereas the latter is used as a verb as in constructions like "connections time out after a while". I believe this is correct use and have left this.
  • "a NAI" is also fixed for "a NAIRealm" - all now use "an"

All other bullets in this ticket were fixed verbatim in my working copy. I consider this ticket complete.

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