Opened 13 years ago

Closed 13 years ago

Last modified 12 years ago

#79 closed defect (fixed)

Editoral Changes for the PS draft from Fred Templin

Reported by: kempf@… Owned by: kempf@…
Priority: minor Milestone:
Component: nohost-ps Severity:
Keywords: PS draft Cc: netlmm@…

Description

3) Section 1.0, insert paragraph break before: "Firstly ...".

4) Section 1.0, sentence beginning: "While it is possible...", change to read: "While it is possible that existing localized mobility management protocols could be used with HIP and Mobike, some would require additional effort to implement and deploy in a non-Mobile IPv6 mobile environment."

5) Section 1.0, insert paragraph break before: "Secondly...".

7) Section 1.1, definition for "Global Mobility Management

Protocol", suggest changing: "invalidates a global unicast address on the local IP link currently in active use by the mobile node." to: "invalidates a global unicast address of the mobile node.". Also, the sentence beginning "(Note: although Mobike..." seems extraneous and could be dropped.

8) Section 1.1, definition for "Global Mobility Anchor Point"

seems overly-long. Suggest dropping the section beginning with: "For Mobile IP...".

Change History (4)

comment:1 Changed 13 years ago by kempf@…

  • Status changed from new to assigned

comment:2 Changed 13 years ago by kempf@…

  • version changed from 1.0 to 2.0

comment:3 Changed 13 years ago by kempf@…

  • Resolution set to fixed
  • Status changed from assigned to closed

comment:4 Changed 12 years ago by anonymous

  • Milestone milestone2 deleted

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