Changeset 526

Timestamp:

05/03/09 06:23:23 (13 years ago)

Author:

mnot@…

Message:

clarify language in caching negotiated responses

File:

• draft-ietf-httpbis/latest-roy/p6-cache.xml (modified) (2 diffs)

draft-ietf-httpbis/latest-roy/p6-cache.xml

@@ -683 +683 @@
       <section anchor="caching.negotiated.responses" title="Caching Negotiated Responses">
         <t>Use of server-driven content negotiation (&server-driven-negotiation;) alters
-          the conditions and procedure by which a cache can use the response for subsequent
+          the conditions under which a cache can use the response for subsequent
           requests.</t>
-        <t>When the cache receives a request which may be satisfied by a stored response
-          that includes a Vary header field (<xref target="header.vary"/>), it &MUST-NOT; use the stored response to satisfy the request unless
-          all of the selecting request-headers present in the new request match the corresponding
+        <t>When a cache receives a request which may be satisfied by a stored response
+          that includes a Vary header field (<xref target="header.vary"/>), it &MUST-NOT; use that response unless
+          all of the selecting request-headers in the presented request match the corresponding
           stored request-headers from the original request.</t>
         <t>The selecting request-headers from two requests are defined to match if and only if the
@@ -698 +698 @@
           resource can only be properly interpreted by the origin server.</t>
         <t>If no stored response matches, the cache &MAY; forward the presented request to the origin
-          server in a conditional request, which &SHOULD; include all ETags stored with 
+          server in a conditional request, and &SHOULD; include all ETags stored with 
           potentially suitable responses in an If-None-Match request header. If the server responds with 304 (Not Modified) and
           includes an entity tag or Content-Location that indicates the entity to be used, that