Opened 9 years ago

Closed 9 years ago

#8 closed enhancement (fixed)

editorials for dime-nat-control-03

Reported by: jouni.nospam@… Owned by: dime@…
Priority: minor Milestone:
Component: nat-control Version:
Severity: In WG Last Call Keywords:
Cc: dime@…, dime-chairs@…

Description

As part of my WGLC review of draft-ietf-dime-nat-control-03 following editorials should be addressed:

Abstract:

o Usually we do not use abbreviations in the abstract unless the abbreviation can be considered very well known. Within the scope of this document NAT, DNCA, NAS, NAPT abbreviations should not be used in the abstract text.

Section 3.1:

o LSN is never expanded nor included into the list of abbreviations in Section 2.

Section 4.2:

o Abbreviations NCR and NCA are not included in the abbreviations in Section 2.

Section 5.1:

o s/IPSec/IPsec

Section 5.5:

o s/Abort-Session-Answer (AAA)/Abort-Session-Answer (ASA)

o s/Accounting-Answer (AAA)/Accounting-Answer (ACA)

Section 7.5:

o Reference to [I-D.ietf-dime-diameter-qos] is wrong. Should be RFC5777

o And the AVPs are not reused from the QoS Application but rather from the QoS Parameters RFC5777. I.e. you need to rephrase the text a bit.

Section 8:

o s/Accounting Request/Accounting?-Request

Section 14.x:

o Unused Reference: 'I-D.narten-iana-considerations-rfc2434bis'

o Unused Reference: 'I-D.nishitani-cgn'

o Unused Reference: 'RFC5624'

o Unused Reference: 'TS32299'

Change History (1)

comment:1 Changed 9 years ago by shwethab@…

  • Resolution set to fixed
  • Status changed from new to closed

Resolved in draft version 4

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